The Sneeze – Second Flipbook

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   Tom Jech | September 26, 2008 at 02:49

   I actually didn’t have a problem with the cuts in the previous iteration.

   As it is now, the cut between frames 30-31 is jarring because you flip the sides of the screen that the characters are on. Such a flip disorients the viewer. Perhaps you know the 180 degree rule? In case you do not, here is a crappy little vid I found: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HdyyuqmCW14

   You mentioned you wanted more tension in the camera angles. Why so? The wide shot seems to emphasize the boredom of the scene. The character is waiting and has nothing to do- prompting his later actions. Why create tension in the previous shots?

   I think you could forgo any cuts and use only the wide shot for the whole piece. Such shots are often used for pantomime comedy (Charlie Chaplin, Buster Keaton) because they have some sort of inherent comedy in and of themselves. (I don’t recall at the moment why this is the case, I apologize).

   One of my tutors in the past would say to me “Do it in ONE.” A phrase that asks a creator “what do you absolutely need to tell your story?” If you had to tell your story in ONE shot, which would you choose? Often, once I had found a way to “do it in one” it was the best way to tell my story.

   Thoughts? Clarifications?
   
   -Tom

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   Avner Engel | September 26, 2008 at 07:08

   Thanks Tom, I understand and agree with everything you said. Cheers for pointing this one out.