Oct04 3

The Sneeze – first crossover to Maya

Here is what I managed to block out during lunch over the past 5 days. It still missing the ending bit, but that is going to be added soon.

Jason | October 6, 2008 at 09:45

Looking good bro…i like where it ends now…wasnt a fan of the the guy doing the pat down at the end!
Darrell | October 8, 2008 at 10:20

Nice Av. I like the feel of the bus moving a lot! the acting looks really good man! Hey by the way I have no clue what you were trying to tell me on my last jump flipbook test… haha! Keep it up man!

Darrell
Tomas | October 12, 2008 at 09:59

Hey Avner!

The blocking looks great- I’m sorry I didn’t get to this sooner.

I really only have two comments:

1) I’m unclear on the thought behind the expression on frame 204. The expression is devious, malicious- but he is not planning to do anything mean to the other passenger, right? The sneeze occurs by accident. It just seems odd, as if he were about to pull a prank rather than just read over someone’s shoulder.

2) Just in terms of readability, the pose on frame 250 seems too early to hit such an extreme. The appeal and jolt of the sneeze is lessened, I think, because you hit the extreme pose before the sneeze. Contrast is key for appeal- if you have large moves throughout the whole piece, they will all blend together. But if the character is a bit more reserved and then the sneeze makes him hit an extreme pose, the shot will read better and be more appealing.

That’s my take. For better or worse.
Again, follow your own instincts. I’m just giving you my gut reaction- I reserve the right to be wrong

Keep up the great work!
-Tom