“Heads Up” – almost there
I started cleaning up minor things like hitches in the spacing, arcs penettrating geometry etc. If you feel like nit-picking my shot, go for it, just don’t forget to let me know whats need fixing.
I am still not happy with the spacing on the body between frames 245-290 and still working on it.
Another thing that is on my to do list is tone down the stretch on on the body just before the apple hits the dude’s head.
Thanks for watching.
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Hi, my name is Avner, and I am addicted to animation!
Welcome to my work in progress animation workbook. Feel free to share ideas, thoughts, feedback or anything else that can help me evolve and further my learning. 
hey av!
this is looking great! i just have a few comments, hopefully they will help
i think there is too much shoulder movement when he turns the page at the beginning. i think the arm moves from the shoulder, but you don’t need the shoulder moving that much.
when he turns the page at the beg, his pupils should be looking at the top of the fresh page, not where he was looking before the page turned.
i don’t like how he stretches up towards the apple before it hits him on the head. maybe you can get away with it for 1 frame, but with 2 it feels like he’s expecting it, or it just feels off cause why would he be moving at that point? also on that action, he’s simply stretching up and growing in volume, so if you’re gonna have him do that he needs to skinny up on the shift, and move more than just his ribcage piece.
i like the side shift along the bench!
when he’s opening his book at the end again, i dont feel like he’s looking at the apple on the ground, he’s looking too high up.
i think when his head is in profile at the end, he’s looking at the apple still, but i think he should be looking in his book to find his page. then when he settles into the last pose, he can glare angrily at the apple or branch.
hope this helps!
great work
Hey Av,
Looking great!
Just 4 notes for from me:
First the page turn, it looks much better now. But the elbow looks like it should keep going past frame 50. It feels like it stops too abruptly.
Second, 140-150 feels like it’s all the same spacing and moving at the same time. I would probably try and break this up so there’s more of an overlap. As in: body moves first, then maybe shoulder next then the head last.
240-250 I would also push the overlap on this section and also break up the hand holding the book a little more. It stays at a right-angle for most of it.
255-265, again things moving at the same time. I know I keep pointing the same thing out but I really think that’s all this shot needs – separated actions. The intention is there and it’s reading well. I think once you separate the movement this will really come to life.
Cheers!
Nino
Hi Avner,
I think the page turn works much better!
Agree with Nino about 240 to 250, a bit more overlap would help the action…I feel it’s a bit fast, especially since he did that fast slide on the chair, I think overlapping that part would help us to see more what’s going on…Also, the right foot on in that section, I’d lift the heel a little bit when he slides.
his right hand on the knee feels at tad fast at the end… I’m even tempted to suggest the hand motion earlier like maybe 270… I like that his hand is already on his knee when he turns around, but I think some fingers overlap would help…
Great work !
Em
Hey Av,
This is looking great, i only have a few notes
Not sure why he would stretch up FR 116 it feels like he knows the apple is dropping.
Not sure if it is the camera angle but it feels like the fingers of the right hand intersect the head at FR 185.
Fr 258-268 i would offset the head a bit, at the moment if feels like the head and shoulders are moving at the same time.
Keep up the good work champ.