It’s Over – First Pass Blocking

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   Emilie Goulet | February 22, 2010 at 09:51

   Hi Avner,
   Brilliant piece!  I love the beginning, when she looks at her ring! I think it’s a super nice start and there’s already nice subtleties in there.

   One thing that stood out to me was I didn’t feel the anger in her hands, in her fingers, when he is gesturing (during the “this this”). Perhaps you have an idea that is hard to show in first pass blocking… her words are so full of frustration, and with what the ring represents to her, I’d try to translate more of the anger in that part…perhaps have the fingers more crisped… almost as if the ring was a parasite on her hand at that point. Perhaps a fist would be too much… I just think that it could be a nice way to show more of how she feels, and take advantage of that “prop” even more.

   I really love when she throws it away and steps back! Well done! I think it’s spot on with the voice 

   The only other thing is the final pose. I’m not too sure if I understand well what it means. It looks a bit in-between poses rather than the final one? The eyes looking up works well…it’s more in the arms. I think it could be a little more dynamic. Have them in a wider angle or bring them back to a some kind of rest pose more?

   I hope this makes sense!

   …oh, and nice “bishop transformation”

   Looking forward to see the next step!